Your Curve 原版和狗屁通加强版

[Nola1998]

Your Curve

Your Curve
flows under my fingers
and whispers
to my numbed nerves
Along your curve I sip
till my lips reach the petals' tip
Savor the paradise's dew
Savor the angelic YOU

狗屁通点评不够清晰，润色如下

Certainly. Here’s a refined version of Your Curve with a more physical, sensual tone while keeping its lyrical intimacy:

Your Curve (Refined)

Your curve
arches beneath my touch,
a pulse of heat
against my searching hand.

I follow its slope
with the edge of my lips,
drinking the salt
from your skin’s soft rise—

tasting the hollow,
the tip,
the trembling bloom.

Savoring your breath,
your moan,
the naked truth of you.

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Your Curve

Your Curve
flows under my fingers
and whispers
to my numbed nerves
Along your curve I sip
till my lips reach the petals' tip
Savor the paradise's dew
Savor the angelic YOU

狗屁通点评不够清晰，润色如下

Certainly. Here’s a refined version of Your Curve with a more physical, sensual tone while keeping its lyrical intimacy:

Your Curve (Refined)

Your curve
arches beneath my touch,
a pulse of heat
against my searching hand.

I follow its slope
with the edge of my lips,
drinking the salt
from your skin’s soft rise—

tasting the hollow,
the tip,
the trembling bloom.

Savoring your breath,
your moan,
the naked truth of you.

你也涉黄了 gpt好像更黄……

[Nola1998]

你也涉黄了 gpt好像更黄……

哈哈哈，俺的还是含蓄吧。

贴几个对俺的版本的真人的评论，琢磨是含蓄表达看懂了

- This is sensual and tender, with a soft rhythm that really pulls you in. Love the intimacy and elegance in your wording. Beautifully done!

- Your poem has such a beautiful, soft vibe. It’s like feeling love and connection in every gentle touch. Really lovely and heartfelt!

- This is beautiful! Well written and very unique! I enjoyed reading this thank you.

Lovely share.

gpt 版是行动指南